Feedback For Our First Pitch

   Feedback

• The first bit of feedback given was that the female was much more interesting. So to improve the idea we are going to concentrate more on her character and what will make her even more interesting to engage the audience.
• No point doing slow motion because there needs to be a lot of movement. As a group we really like this idea and feel we could make it work so we are going to think of how we could develop the artists performance to make it more affective.
• The guy seems slightly out of place although it is all about him, the stuff with the female is much more interesting. When my group and myself got our feedback we also agreed with this comment so we are still going to keep the artist in the video but show more shots of the female; we have also considered doing more shots with them together.
• The dancer will need to be able to choreograph a dance. As I am a dancer myself, this is not a problem. I will choreograph a simple but affective dance for the actor to do.
• Loved the water floor. We were happy with this feedback as we also really like this idea, as it is quite different. However we are trying to work out how we could do it in the short about of time we have to film.
• The street is not going to look like the street we imagine. After a discussion with the group we are either going to change the idea of the street or go out one afternoon and try and find somewhere that fits with what we have in mind.
• Good song choice. We were pleased with this comment.  
• We need a third element, it is too short needs something more. We are each going to think of some ideas on how to  develop another element.

WHAT ARE EACH GOING TO DO TO MAKE IT BETTER? 

Develop the performance element: Lucas

Consider what dance we are going to have, e.g style, choreography: Hannah (Me)

A third element and how we can incorporate it into the video: Gustavo
The set/location/lighting: Kai